IELTS WRITING TASK 2

An increasing number of people are choosing cosmetic surgery.

Why do people choose to change the way they look?

Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

(BC Vietnam - 25 Feb 2023)

OUTLINE

INTRODUCTION

- Background: Cosmetic surgery: growing demand for beautification in many parts of the world in recent years  

- Brief answers: Common reasons, Largely negative 

BODY 1

- Topic sentence: Common reasons for surgical ways of changing physical appearance

- Reason 1: Build up one’s confidence  

- Example: Le Giang, a famous middle-aged actor in Vietnam

- Reason 2: Bring ones fame and fortune

- Reason 3: Regain health after incidents of serious burns or car accidents  

BODY 2

- Topic sentence: Limit with adequate warnings

- Example 1: Copies of Fan Bingbing

- Explanation 1: Have improper beauty standards based on social media

- Explanation 2: Affect their health

- Example 2: Jocelyn Wildenstein

CONCLUSION

Restate the introduction

FULL ESSAY

It is undoubted that the demand for beautification has been growing in many parts of the world in recently years, leading to enormous popularity of plastic surgery. In fact, there are a large number of different causes for this trend; however, I suppose abusing this type of plastic surgery could be largely negative.  

It is easy to understand why more and more individuals decide to change their physical appearance in such surgical ways. The first and most obvious motive is that the method helps people build up their confidence. One good illustration is that a famous middle-aged Vietnamese actor, namely Le Giang, has experienced about twenty beauty surgeries in order to satisfy her burning desire for her appealing look. Moreover, a majority of young celebrities come to the artificial beauty as it is likely to bring them fame and fortune. Alongside the materialistic purposes, several patients must undergo the medical treatment to regain their health after incidents of serious burns or car accidents.  

Nevertheless, I think the cosmetic beauty should be limited with adequate warnings due to its terrible risks. For instance, some pretty Chinese girls spent a huge sum and ages having various surgeries so that they look like their idol, called Fan Bingbing. The factual figure seems to show that a rising number of young people have improper beauty standards based on social media. Besides, if someone has such beauty options, their health will be severely affected, or even failing surgeries can cause loss of their lives. Jocelyn Wildenstein, whose face became distorted after some cosmetic surgeries, is an outstanding example of the failure.             

In short, beautifying is sometimes believed to a justifiable need for self-esteem or wealth, but I am against the widespread prevalence of the cosmetic surgery due to its considerable dangers.      

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VOCABULARY

- The growing demand for beautification: Nhu cầu làm đẹp gia tăng

-  Lead to enormous popularity of plastic surgery: Dẫn đến sự phổ biến mạnh mẽ của phẫu thuật thẩm mỹ

-  Abuse this type of  plastic surgery: Lạm dụng phẫu loại phẫu thuật chỉnh hình này

- surgical ways of changing physical appearance: Việc thay đổi ngoại hình bằng cách phẫu thuật

- experience beauty surgeries: trải qua các cuộc phẫu thuật thẩm mỹ

- satisfy her burning desire for her appealing look: thỏa mãn khát khao cháy bỏng để có được vẻ ngoài quyến rũ

- artificial beauty: vẻ đẹp nhân tạo

- bring them fame and fortune: mang lại danh tiếng và tiền tài cho họ

- materialistic purposes: mục đích thiên về vật chất

- undergo the medical treatment: trải qua phương pháp điều trị y học này

- regain their health after incidents of serious burns or car accidents: tăng cường sức khỏe sau những biến cố do bỏng nặng hay tai nạn giao thông

- cosmetic beauty: vẻ đẹp thẩm mỹ, vẻ đẹp nhân tạo

- adequate warnings: những cảnh báo đầy đủ

- terrible risks: những nguy cơ khủng khiếp

-  spend a huge sum: chi một khoản tiền khủng

- look like their idol: trông giống thần tượng của họ

- have improper beauty standards based on social media: có tiêu chuẩn sai về cái đẹp dựa trên truyền thông mạng

- Severly affect the health: Ảnh hưởng nghiêm trọng đến sức khỏe

- failing surgeries can cause loss of lives: những cuộc thẩm mỹ thất bại có thể gây ra cái chết

- Distorted: Bị méo mó

- considerable dangers: những nguy hiểm đáng lo ngại

- self-esteem: lòng tự trọng, tự tôn

- wealth: sự giàu có